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Today is my birthday. It’s a holiday called “Midori-no-hi” in Japan. I’ve come back to my parents’ house, so I’m celebrating with my relatives.
My birthday is on the same day as my nephew and niece’s — they’re twins. So the three of us are being celebrated together at a big party.

Original statement
Today is my birthday. It’s holiday named “Midori-no-hi” in Japan. I have came back my parents house. So I am celebrated with my relatives. My birthday is same day as my nephew and niece, they are twins. And then we three are celebrated together in big party.

Explanation of corrections
1.“It’s holiday named ‘Midori-no-hi’” → “It’s a holiday called ‘Midori-no-hi’”
Articles: In English, singular countable nouns need an article, so “a holiday” instead of “holiday”.
Verb: “called” is more natural than “named” in this context.

2.“I have came back my parents house” → “I’ve come back to my parents’ house”
Grammar: “have came” is incorrect; the correct past participle is “come” → “have come”.
Preposition: You need “to” after “come back”.
Possessive: “parents house” should be “parents’ house” (possessive apostrophe).

3.“So I am celebrated with my relatives” → “So I’m celebrating with my relatives”
Voice: “am celebrated” is passive, which sounds unnatural here. The active form “I’m celebrating” is better for expressing your own experience.

4.“My birthday is same day as my nephew and niece” → “My birthday is on the same day as my nephew and niece’s”
Preposition: In British English, we say “on the same day”.
Article: “the same day”, not “same day”.
Possessive: “nephew and niece’s” because the birthday belongs to them. (This avoids repeating “birthday”.)

5.“they are twins. And then we three are celebrated together in big party” → “they’re twins. So the three of us are being celebrated together at a big party.”
Contraction: More natural to use “they’re” than “they are” in casual speech.
Connector: “So” is smoother and more logical than “And then”.
Voice: “are celebrated” becomes “are being celebrated” for proper passive form in present progressive.
Article: “a big party”, not “big party” — singular countable nouns require an article.

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