Barbecue - 065/100 -

Today, we had a barbecue at my wife’s family home. It’s a beautiful sunny day, perfect for a BBQ.

I was in charge of the grilling. We had all sorts of ingredients, such as beef tongue, kalbi, shrimp, corn, and mushrooms. I especially recommend the beef tongue — it’s really juicy and thick. We had a wonderful time.

Original statement

Today we have a barbecue at my wife’s house she was born. It’s a great sunny day so good for a BBQ.

I was responsible for grilling. We had many sorts of ingredients such as beef tun, carbee, shrimp, corn, mashroom. Specifically I recommend the beef tun. It’s really juicy and thin. 

We had special time.

Corrections and Explanations

1.“we have a barbecue” → “we had a barbecue”

If you are describing a completed event earlier today, past tense (had) is more natural.

2.“at my wife’s house she was born” → “at my wife’s family home where she was born”

More natural and polite to say family home. Also, adding where connects the two ideas better.

3.“It’s a great sunny day so good for a BBQ” → “It’s a beautiful sunny day, perfect for a BBQ”

Beautiful sunny day sounds more natural; perfect for a BBQ is smoother than so good for a BBQ.

4.“I was responsible for grilling” → “I was in charge of the grilling”

In charge of is the more natural British English expression here.

5.“many sorts of ingredients such as beef tun, carbee, shrimp, corn, mashroom” → “all sorts of ingredients, such as beef tongue, kalbi, shrimp, corn, and mushrooms”

Many sorts → all sorts is the more natural casual phrase.

Corrected spelling mistakes: tun → tongue, carbee → kalbi, mashroom → mushroom.

6.“Specifically I recommend the beef tun” → “I especially recommend the beef tongue”

Specifically sounds a bit formal here; especially fits better.

7.“We had special time” → “We had a wonderful time”

Special time is understandable but unnatural. Wonderful time is the common expression.